[vlc-devel] [PATCH] Qt: grammar fixes
edward.c.wang at compdigitec.com
Sat Jul 13 21:38:49 CEST 2013
1) At least in English, most proper nouns do not take the definite article "the". Quote: "most proper nouns use no article". Example: "In order to browse the web, Firefox uses the HTTP protocol."
Notice that it is not "the Firefox uses the HTTP protocol". It is OK to use "the web browser", since 'web browser' is not a common noun.
We use 'the' in 'the HTTP protocol' because protocol is not a proper noun. HTTP is the adjective describing the protocol.
Therefore, the 'the' in "In order to ..., the VLC" is awkward and should be removed.
2) covert arts → cover art (the artwork is not secret or concealed, by definition in English of covert)
'authoring' in English refers to the process/result and not 'artists' as generally used in media players.
3) Use 'this'
>From English Language and Usage:
"For a concept or idea introduced a few sentences before, I think the key thing is whether it was introduced by you or the person you're talking to. If you introduced it, you're "holding" the idea - use "this""
Since our text introduces the idea of automatic retrival, the correct word to use is 'this'.
Improves the flow of the passage by logically explaining a consequence of the first idea.
modules/gui/qt4/dialogs/firstrun.cpp | 8 ++++----
1 file changed, 4 insertions(+), 4 deletions(-)
diff --git a/modules/gui/qt4/dialogs/firstrun.cpp b/modules/gui/qt4/dialogs/firstrun.cpp
index e66ee7e..448e5b9 100644
@@ -69,16 +69,16 @@ void FirstRun::buildPrivDialog()
QGroupBox *blabla = new QGroupBox( qtr( "Privacy and Network Access Policy" ) );
QGridLayout *blablaLayout = new QGridLayout( blabla );
QLabel *text = new QLabel( qtr(
- "<p>In order to protect your privacy, the <i>VLC media player</i> "
+ "<p>In order to protect your privacy, <i>VLC media player</i> "
"does <b>not</b> collect personal data or transmit them, "
"not even in anonymized form, to anyone."
"<p>Nevertheless, <i>VLC</i> is able to automatically retrieve "
"information about the media in your playlist from third party "
- "Internet-based services. That includes covert arts, track names, "
- "authoring and other meta-data."
+ "Internet-based services. This includes cover art, track names, "
+ "artist names and other meta-data."
- "That may entail identifying some of your media files to third party "
+ "Consequently, this may entail identifying some of your media files to third party "
"entities. Therefore the <i>VLC</i> developers require your express "
"consent for the media player to access the Internet automatically."
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